One final thing, I think, to keep it inline with the whole dictionary definition may be to remove the "Science is" at the start of the definition. After that, I think it's ready to hit the store.
Really great first submission. Hope to see more from you!
Good deal. Something else that's nagging at me is "Science" (at the very top) shouldn't be capitalized. It looks less like a true dictionary definition with the capital S.
I think it's a very good first effort that could be improved with these couple of tweaks perhaps: 1) Drop the "s" from Republican 2) Increase the size and make the title "Republican Health Care Plan" split across two lines, two words to each line 3) Make "Don't get sick" larger 4) Shrink "but if you do, die quickly" small and put it in parens 5) Drop "before bankruptcy" or shrink it even more than the "die quickly" line
This'd make it pretty solid methinks. And very topical; I'm surprised we don't have many (or any) other health care designs!
I really like the idea; it's pretty funny. I think the text might be better "Ever think the sound of your cereal is it screaming for help as it drowns in your milk?" Also the text would be great with a different font and if it started on the top line very large and got smaller each successive line down.
Other than that, the drawing could use a little bit of sprucing up. It would be greatly improved with a bit of depth (i.e., shadows, highlights, textures, etc.)
One final thing, I think, to keep it inline with the whole dictionary definition may be to remove the "Science is" at the start of the definition. After that, I think it's ready to hit the store.
Really great first submission. Hope to see more from you!
if I were to change one thing it would be to change it from right justify to Full to get rid of the jagged edge.
Totally agree with that.
Ah, and you should capitalize Christian.
1) Drop the "s" from Republican
2) Increase the size and make the title "Republican Health Care Plan" split across two lines, two words to each line
3) Make "Don't get sick" larger
4) Shrink "but if you do, die quickly" small and put it in parens
5) Drop "before bankruptcy" or shrink it even more than the "die quickly" line
This'd make it pretty solid methinks.
Have you tried a thicker font? I'm not sure, but wondering if it would be better that way or with the current font. Just a thought.
Other than that, the drawing could use a little bit of sprucing up. It would be greatly improved with a bit of depth (i.e., shadows, highlights, textures, etc.)